Rev. 10 created by Mariqnne 2021-01-31 02:17:28

Condensed the huge mass of sprawling, circuitous text that is the second paragraph, and re-integrated necessary details into the rest of the first paragraph. You don't need to crochet sentences together to be informational.

Rev. 11 created by Mariqnne 2021-01-31 02:19:31

Minor edits.